Second Rough Cut
Here is my second rough cut of my opening where I have improved certain aspects from my first rough cut. This included adding the studio indents of my production and distribution companies, changing where the titles are placed and editing one shot which is particularly grainy although may end up changing the edit to improve it some more. I also realised once I had converted the opening that the Dimension Films indent it slightly shows about a second of another companies indent which I intend to remove.Second Rough Cut
I still think you need to go with straight cuts to black rather than fades - the cuts look better
ReplyDeleteYou need to work out some way of breaking up the long take of Bea on the bed at about 01:30. I wonder if you can cut before the reverse zoom (01:08) and again before she gets up?
Would be good if you could get some stings for the more dramatic bits
You need to cut up the long shot of Bea in the hall, ideally losing some of the less effective camera movement (e.g. at about 02:15)
The continuity error with the bathroom door is still there (02:35)
The end could do with a little more work (title seems to fizzle out a little)